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Scoot's avatar

This is beautiful. What a way to open up Narrowtives! Youve really nailed it on this one. I was impressed by how much Character you packed into 250 words. I usually skip characters and I always find myself wanting for more words!

Well done!

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Derek Petty's avatar

Truly appreciate that Scoot. I consider this the highest of compliments coming from the likes of you.

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Cork Hutson's avatar

Echoing Scoot - Captured perfectly Grandpa Eli's calm trust in the Creator and the skepticism (maybe ignorance) of Tuck. Loved it, Derek. I have a camping memory that stands out that I think I will give a shot at this.

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Derek Petty's avatar

Can’t wait to see it Cork! Thank you for your kindness.

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Lausanne Davis Carpenter's avatar

Beautifully described in rich character voice. Well done. I can hear the music.

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Derek Petty's avatar

Thank you!

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